Thursday, 27 August 2020

My fixed sick sentence

 Opening his mouth wide like a steam train the big giant yelled. Not caring at all that his big head was a grey colour he looked around to see what was biting him. Although he was really humongous and terrifying the  microscopic insects in the grass ignored his wining and continued to munch.     


3 comments:

  1. Kia ora Hiwatt. Thank you for sharing your writing with us. You have thought carefully about the words you used to describe the giant. You also used our class blog to help you use a variety of sentences starters. Well done, this sentence is no longer sick.

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  2. Hi my name is Jon.
    nis stashuw

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  3. Kia Ora Hiwatt, my name is Jorjah and I am a year 7 student at Paihia School. I like your blog post about fixing the sentence because I remember doing it when I was a year 5 and I was really good at it. I like that you added a picture so that I could understand what you were fixing your sentence about. What did you like the most about this ?

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